coming of age article

i'm guest editing a series of articles for a local publication. the brief to this particular writer was to write a personal narrative on getting older and how one manages their identity through both their successes and failures..errr...the publication is a men's only publication that focuses on successful living etc. anyway, i thought this particular piece was interesting, funny and a little sad. i attach (with the author's (belated) permission) the beginning of the (VERY ROUGH 1st DRAFT)article:

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